It’s already time for Poetry Friday and 15 Words or Less poems (which is actually posted on Thursday).
My first stanza is well under the 15-word limit, but it seemed unfinished without a second; I wonder if Laura will
noticeban me from 15 Words mind that I slipped over the word count a teensy weensy bit with the second stanza addition (kinda like the Wal-mart shoppers who sneak 23 items one or two extra items in the 20-item Express Lane).
Here’s the photo Laura used for this week’s "15 Words":
Prismatic season
Fire-lit hues
Slowly verdancy diffused.
Rainbow spectrum
Key of red
All too soon, their fall, ahead.
Because, sometimes when I write, I get a little carried away…here are my "rejects", the ones that made me giggle. Just tack either one of them on as stanza three…
Soon to fall
Grab a rake and help us, y’all!
or
Crimson glory
Umbrageous wake
Once they fall, help! Grab a rake!
And then, there’s Haiku Friday…
Breathtaking beauty
Leafy pallets, artist’s muse
Death, then life again
Try one…try them all…and be sure to let me know if you do :).
This:
Ignited color
Soon to fall
Grab a rake and help us, y’all!
Should be sent to a poetry editor. Your prose, your emotions and your Y’all, it just takes me away.
Now Ah jest hear chikins in the background sqwawking away and the kids grabbin them there rakes so they can pile the leaves on the ground for a fiyar.
Oh wait, that was a dream. Whew. Vivid poetry you got here Robin.
But seriously most of the poems were really good!
you did well.
I may try this…. another time.
right now I need to go to my on line Merriam Webster to find out what you said (:
As I am a hopeless poet I would have been delighted to have penned any of these as I think they’re great.
My favorite line is this:
Ignited color
Loved them all, though.
Gee, you’re good!
I really liked those – well done!
Very well done. To ber honest, my favorite thing about your writing is that you know how to spell “y’all”! I have called businesses in at least 14 states to tell them that their signs are misspelled!
Of course, I can’t spell “be”!
beautifully writ, robin.
Jenn, are you mocking me? Because I think you’re mocking me, and if that’s the case, let’s laugh t.o.g.e.t.h.e.r….deal? 🙂 (btw, I LIKE it when you talk country!)
Pamela, it just occurred to me (after reading your comment) NO WONDER POETS ARE OFTEN VIEW AS PRETENTIOUS! HA! Who the heck uses words like “prismatic” and “umbrageous” in casual conversation??? Geez (lol).
Awww, Chris, Alix & Janet…thank y’all :). That cool air up my skirt was nice and swooshie!
Kim, I LOVE it when people tell me their favorite line!! Prose, poetry, doesn’t matter (I often mentally choose favorite lines when I read others…sometimes I tell ’em, sometimes I don’t–but I really should make it a habit all the time).
Sandy, LOVED your comment…especially the second one (lol). Hmmm, maybe I should try to find a way to weave the word “y’all” into all my posts….
I love seeing this creative side of you!
Lol, I like both endings! Hmm… maybe the first, a teensy bit better.
Your haiku is pretty cool too. :~)
Poetry Friday… what an awesome idea!!!! I wish my brain could be creative at the end of the week. I can barely type out a semi-coherent comment. Have a good weekend, Robin.
(((Hugs)))
I am so not a poet.
**sigh**
But YOU? Yup. You’ve got it goin girl.
Thanks for the smiles…
All were very good! But I loved the Haiku!
“Grab a rake and help us, ya’ll” LOL!!! I love it!