Twenty-three years and a lifetime ago, she made a choice that has haunted her every day since. It was paradox, really, the ultimate in self-preservation and narcissism yet simultaneously, extreme sacrifice. At the time, she only understood how it would serve her; how it would allow her the indulgence to live out the fairytale life she had constructed to counter the nightmare she lived instead. To outsiders, she was living a fabled existence, but those within the Disney-manicured gardens and stuccoed walls knew better–lies, deceit, inconsistencies, and poison-tipped word-daggers that left invisible scars. Years later, she finally lifted the veil to realize her motive had been undefinable love, the hope of more for someone who had nothing to give her in return. A love that only intensified with time, not based on merit or emotion but just because. A love that might only be met with disgust or contempt or anger or perhaps worst of all, indifference. Soon she would know: in 72 minutes, for the first time since his arrival, she would see her firstborn son.
Ack! I don’t know how to write fiction!! But, just like all you non-poets who step out on thin ice to write poetry for Pensieve’s Poetic License (or even Friday’s 40), I’m venturing into unchartered waters for Woodlandmama’s (A Monkey in the Wrong Tree) Fun Monday theme. She’d love to have you join in–write your own "unusual love story", then comment to her so she can add you to the list!
Ooh, this is excellent. Love it!
Great story. Good hook at the end.
I’d say you can write fiction – that was wonderful!
I think you did a great job. Thanks for participating!
I’m so not a fiction writer, either, but I think yours is awesome! I’m giving you an award today on my blog. You’ve probably already won one, but you’re one of my favorites so I couldn’t pass it up!
This read has a very nice ending. You could not have played it out any better.
Thank you.
Kudos for your wonderful ‘take’ on this week’s challenge! I’m eager to read on … so maybe you’re better at fiction than you thought? Alas, creativity abandoned me this morning … so I’ve taken a different path this morning at Small Reflections … just because.
Hugs and blessings,
I think you are an excellant writer…I love this paragraph…you have me wondering what she did 23 years ago!!
Robin that was fabulous. You can so write fiction.
Robin that was fabulous. You can so write fiction.
Ooer, erm, I liked it so much I commented twice, no, three times. 😀
Ooer, erm, I liked it so much I commented twice, no, three times. 😀
Hey, this is cool. I may have to amend my earlier [still standing] offer to edit your inevitable non-fiction books so it includes all future fiction efforts. I have a feeling there’s a “Twilight” in you somewhere.
Nicely done, Robin.
Good job sista!
Well for someone who “doesn’t know how to write fiction,” I’d say you did a great job. 🙂 Very intriguing and makes me curious for more!
very cool! you did great.
Guys, THANK YOU for your uber-kind comments today. I’m having techie difficulties and have not been able to respond, but seeing these now blesses my socks off!!
Y’all ROCK like a Bentwood!!!
xo
🙂
Can’t write fiction? I dunno about that… looks like a good job to me! 🙂
Nice job, Robin. Very descriptive and a great hook at the end. You did quite well for someone who “can’t” write fiction! Somehow I didn’t believe that line in twitter anyway. 😀
I thought you WERE a fiction writer! Sounded good to me! Found your blog through Shara at mom in transition.